First, I must confess I often misread the rhythm of a poem. It does have sleek lines and nice metaphor. Also, I like the phrase "exhausted of existing." Nicely done!
Wow this is so dark. Idk how currently relevant it is, I just always want to provide hugs and comfort! But only as someone who's been there. The void is truly a lonely place but if you let it become an incubator, you can eventually start to see your own light and let it guide you to a place where you can hold both the void and the light. Beautiful work Sam, I was locked in!
Maaan. I love your metaphors and the rhythms of this piece. This was really touching and poetic (cause it’s a poem, duuh😅)
I love it!!
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First, I must confess I often misread the rhythm of a poem. It does have sleek lines and nice metaphor. Also, I like the phrase "exhausted of existing." Nicely done!
Thank you so much for reading
Absolutely gorgeous! I love it! Profound but accessible, perfect!
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I tried to rise but the void held me tight 😭 So good
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The consistency of the melancholic rhythm was perfect... Love this. 🖤🌻
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I *love* the opening lines as this. Would love to hear it spoken
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Absolutely!
Wow! How can a human put this difficult emotions in such beautiful words. You did that 😮💨
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Wao. It was well, well written, flowing in rhythm and generously expressed. Love it <3 Glad we connected.
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Tired of smiling with lips that trembled,
I loved this line
Absolute poetry
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Such a wonderful rhyme scheme!
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Tired of living while quietly dying" ohhh its so deep🫠...
Beautifully articulated 🤍.
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Wow this is so dark. Idk how currently relevant it is, I just always want to provide hugs and comfort! But only as someone who's been there. The void is truly a lonely place but if you let it become an incubator, you can eventually start to see your own light and let it guide you to a place where you can hold both the void and the light. Beautiful work Sam, I was locked in!
Thank you so muchh for giving this ur time and for your kind words!!
This was such and engaging read! Thank you!
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"And shadows learn how to pretend" genuinely love this line...
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This was sad but beautiful also, the line about shadows learning to pretend was especially brilliant!
Thank you for your kind words.
“And I wondered if simply breathing / Can even be called living or a life.” Great lines right, and and a really good question at that!
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